well I listened and before I say anything, Im not really into hardcore or anything similar, the distorted kicks kinda wear on me. But! I think youve got some talent here, the track seems well put together, with a clear idea of what you wanted to acheive! I would love to hear your psytrance, I myself make psy. A clean sound can make a previously weak-sounding song stand out above the mass of music out there.
Keep going! When you think the songs done, tell yourself Good, now what else can I do to it?
but the artist is their own worst critic!